Author: Reny

Story Title: They Are My Everything

Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/renren_2/

Reviewer: morning_glory @ shreddedhearts.blogspot.com



Title: 3/5 This title could be a bit deceptive, because you would assume that you were talking about a love story. But, you aren’t, which makes this title particularly interesting.



Poster/Background: 2/5 This poster is very cute, but the name is really light and hard to see; a darker font for that. The pictures are a bit fuzzy as well.



Forewords: 7/10 Your forewords are good, they tell a bit of the background of this story and what it’s going to be about. It also gives a short little quote from your story, which helps capture readers.



Plot: 12/15 Your plot is different, it is cute but also entertaining. I was kind of prepared for it to be a dream, though, because it skipped so much; if not a dream, then he was in an alternate dimension or something.



Originality: 14/20 I believe it is quite original because the way this story is written is new; this story is about friendship, and it is about a young member who is scared of getting older; that’s interesting.



Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 12/15 There are some spelling and grammar issues, but if you just look over it a couple more times or get a beta reader from season-of-mist.blogspot.com to help you look over it.



Detail: 3/5 You could add a bit more detail about the individual characters in Hey! Say! JUMP, and about Chinen as well, but that’s about it.



Writing Style: 7/10 Your writing style is good, with dialogue and description. Just more of both would be nice; balance them out, too.



Overall Enjoyment: 8/10 This story was very cute, and I enjoyed it very much. J



Bonus: 2/5 Thank you for requesting from Shredded Hearts, and thank you for writing a great story for readers!



Total: 70/100

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