Author: BabyCopGurl
Story Title: Traveling Back In Time
Story URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/BabyCopGurl_01/
Reviewer: purple_lilly @ shreddedhearts.blogspot.com

Title: 5/5

From the sound of it, it sounds interesting already! And, it suites the whole plot.


Poster/Background: 5/5

I liked the poster, not very annoying to look at. The pictures suited the characters and their personalities well. As for your background, I thought you didn't have one XD... but then I saw it. It doesn't distract me from my reading, so thats good.


Forewards: 7/10

The quotes you put in were all used. However, you just put names of the characters. You didn't describe them, I only got to know their personalities by reading the oneshot itself.


Plot: 15/15

It wasn't all over the place. I clearly understood everything, and what was happening between the three people. Personally, I think it was nice of her to move on.


Originality: 19/20

I don't think there are many stories such as this (or oneshot) but there are some titles that are similar. You added your own twists which worked well with the plot. So, well done!


Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 15/15

Excellent! All your spellings were correct, your vocabulary was excellent. But!


Here: “Hello, Yunho!” Soon Yi smiled but you can clearly see the hurt in her eyes. Yun Hee just simply stood there and looked at Yunho and Soon Yi, Yun Hee looked at Yunho's eyes she saw the sadness in them, she looked at Soon Yi's and also saw sadness.


You should've done: “Hello Yunho!” Soon Yi Smiled, but the hurt was evident in her eyes. Yun Hee just simply stood there and looked at the pair in front of her. She looked into Yunho's eyes and saw sadness, she also looked into Soon Yi's eyes and saw similar sadness.


Other than that, everything was fine!


Detail: 5/5

Superb detail my friend. Nothing much to say here again.


Writing Style: 9/10
Its really organized, apart from the thoughts. You could've used ' to represent the thoughts. Or even *. The speech was clearly set out, so nothing wrong with that!


Overall Enjoyment: 10/10
You're a really good writer, and I look forward to reading/reviewing more stories from you! I love everything that happened in the story!


Bonus: 5/5
YOU DESERVE A BONUS! (I'm generous no?)


Total: 95/100

Labels: purple_lilly