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Losing You
Sunday, April 11, 2010, 3:34 PM
Author: CherryChocol8

Story Title: Losing You

Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/JaeMinstory/

Reviewer: morning_glory @ shreddedhearts.blogspot.com



Title: 2/5 Your title is okay, but it gives the main point away. Also, it’s not really that interesting, eye-catching.



Poster/Background: 3/5 Your poster is nice, your background is as well, but your font was a bit hard to see at times. You could consider changing to a different color.



Forewords: 5/10 Your forewords introduced the characters well, but you could put some character descriptions as well. Also, there could also have been a summary and/or a teaser, to interest readers.



Plot: 10/15 Your plot is interesting, even though it has been used many times, the uniqueness of each chapter makes it your own. The additional characters were added skillfully, without any strange entrances. You also didn’t have any sections that were unnecessary or just not relating to the main point of your story. You had a great balance of description and dialogue, keep it up. There were some good twists that made the story unique, interesting the readers that much more.



Originality: 14/20 Your plot is similar to many of the ones on Winglin, but there are subtle differences that make your story stand out, making it original.



Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 13/15 Your grammar and spelling are good, there are some grammar problems, but nothing major. Your punctuation is in all of the right places, and your vocabulary has a lot of variety, so that’s very good as well.



Detail: 3/5 You went into a lot of detail about the characters, but there didn’t seem to be much about the settings, or the things that they did. Keep working on it.



Writing Style: 8/10 Your writing style seems to be in a kind of diary form, because Changmin’s POV seems as if he’s talking to the readers, instead of the readers watching what’s happening. It’s an interesting way of writing, but there is an adequate amount of descriptions and dialogue, so you can keep working on it!



Overall Enjoyment: 10/10 This story was enjoyable to me, and I really enjoyed reviewing it. :)



Bonus: 2/5 2 Bonus pts: 1 for writing a story and requesting reviews from Shredded Hearts, and 1 for writing a great story. Good luck!



Total: 70/100

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