Author: Susan Lee :]
Story Title: 2+2 Could Equal Me And You
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/suxsan4/
Reviewer: ShadowYin @ shreddedhearts.blogspot.com



Title: 4.5/5

Creative, unique, related, and it rhymes. However half point taken away because I think the ‘And’ should be ‘and’ instead. Besides from that it’s perfect.


Poster/Background: 5/5

Unique and beautiful.


Forewords: 8/10

It’s simple and to the point, however a little too short for my liking.


Plot: 14/15

I love it!!! There was so much to it!!! Amazed me so much!

But I thought the part were a lot of celebrities just happened to be in the same school was a bit over the top…? I thought Eunhyuk, Jay and Yoobin being in the same school were a brilliant twist to the story, and I was so shocked when I read that part.



Originality: 18.5/10

Very original and very fun to read. Fanfic with tutors, I have read those before, but this one is just exceptional. A lot of details, well done!

Once of the most original writings I’ve read.



Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 9/15

Minor errors were constantly appearing. Suggest proof reading…examples:



Instead he grabbed his mouse and click rapidly (…grabbed and clicked…)



…and saw him a GET-OUT-OF-THE-WAY look. (AND GAVE…?)



…not you're new best friend (YOUR not YOU’RE) and …if your smart or not? (YOU’RE not YOUR) <- This happened a lot throughout your fic. Remember, ‘you’re’ = ‘you are’ and ‘your’ is possessive, like ‘your bag’ and ‘your pen’ etc.



He rubbed him head on mine (his)



This makes know sense... (NO, not KNOW)



Pices - Should be Pisces



Typos like: int he


Detail: 5/5

A lot of detail there. Great job!



Writing Style: 8/10



Nice use of

Similes

Metaphors

Rhetorical questions

Personification



It’s good. I would say something about the dialogue, but I love it too much xD! The dialogue really shows the characters’ personality.


Overall Enjoyment: 10/10

I had a lot of fun reading your fic! I L.O.V.E.D it :)

Omg!!! Seulong was there too!! Haha~ So happy ^^



Bonus: 5/5

Seulong!

Really fun to read

Original

Really cute

For have the highest total in all the fanfics I’ve reviewed so far :



Total: 87/100

BTW, you got yourself a new reader ;)

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