Author: C andy . C anes
Story Title: My Christmas ‘PRESENT’
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/c_cstorylines3/
Reviewer: morning_glory@ shreddedhearts.blogspot.com

Title: 3/5 Your title shows clearly what your story is about, but I think that I would probably click on it, just to see what it’s about.


Poster/Background: 5/5 Your poster and background fit very well with your story.


Forewords: 7/10 Your forewords were really enthusiastic! It was interesting to see that in the forewords. You did a good job on your summary. It was just that it seemed a bit crowded, because you didn’t make a really big separation between your intro and the summary. So next time, just make it really clear, ok? Good job!


Plot: 12/15 Your plot is really good, but it wasn’t the storyline itself that made me keep reading. It was the language you used, the emotions you invoked. It was interesting to me how you made your story complicating, with the misunderstanding, but, under it all, was the fact that they both still loved each other.


Originality: 15/20 In the beginning, I didn’t really think this plot was that original, but later on, in chapters 9-epilogue, it was really showing the originality. Eunjae, Jackie, and BoA’s mother were really interesting characters, and they improved the overall creativity of the story.


Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 14/15 Your grammar and spelling are really good, but you could try using semi-colons once in a while, to make your sentences more complete.


Detail: 5/5 Your details are really nice, it is really descriptive and it makes little pictures in my head. That makes me happy. :)


Writing Style: 7/10 Your writing style is good; but try to balance description and dialogue to where there’s an equal amount of both in there.


Overall Enjoyment: 7/10 I enjoyed this story a lot, even though there were a LOT of sad parts.


Bonus: 2/5 I gave you 2 bonus, cause a) I liked your story and b) I really liked your characters.



Total: 77/100

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