Author: 'Niii
Story Title: Kiss the Rain
Story URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/_rainfall/
Reviewer: Darkess @ shreddedhearts.blogspot.com

*My reviews are not meant to harm or discourage the author, but to help them fix their stories and do better in the future. The opinions expressed in this review are mine and mine alone, and are not meant to offend you*

Title: 5/5

Perfect. It is an eye catching title, and I believe that anyone who listens to Yiruma will automatically be attracted to it.

Poster/Background: 5/5

Beautiful. I can tell from the poster that it's going to be a sad story as always XD

Forewords: 10/10

Really good intro. You tell your inspiration as well as made the reader wonder why the narrator character has to say goodbye.

Plot: 15/15

:D I love that Key was being the normal umma to Taemin like he is in real life :) I love how you started out the story with Taemin on stage looking for the girl. I also loved how SHE was the one to turn away. Pft. You'd have to be crazy to turn away from Taemin if he was staring at you o.0! Anyways :) I liked the descriptive rain in the story and the meaning that it held.

Originality: 14/20

Eh, I've seen the rain and the break-ups so often now that I tend to try to stay away from them. I'm glad that you didn't give much information on the girl. You only included that Taemin cared about her through your writing which was unique in itself. Many people give a whole background for her. I am glad that you did not.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 14/15

shrieked in cheer

This works, but it should probably be a plural since you're talking about a crowd.

Detail: 5/5

Though it was short, this one shot was packed full of detail. The malicious rain falling in curtains, as well as the rain drops on his luminescent screen. Great job eunnie. You always manage to make your stories seem real.

Writing Style: 10/10

Your writing style is always easy to understand. You use great techniques; you know when to add detail and when to refrain from adding to much. I love that I always feel like I'm living inside a story as I read. This one was easy to picture. The rain, the sliding glass door, Key yelling at Taemin to stay out of the rain... it was all very easy to imagine. I love your writing.

Overall Enjoyment: 7/10

It was short (very short T.T I love your stories so much I never want them to end) but good. I only wish it was longer eunnie!

Bonus: 5/5


Total: 90/100

Labels: Darkess