It was you
Author: Ronix^^
Story Title: It was you
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Asian_Fanatic03/
Reviewer: Liz

Title: 3/5
I didn’t find your fanfic title to me interesting or witty, just a little to bland. If I were looking down the list of fanfics, yours would not have caught my eye. Though it does match and fit right in with your story line..

Poster/Background: 5/5
Absolutely adored your graphics! The poster and background really drew me into the story more then the title did.

Forewords: 6/10
Your forewords was not all that. Meaning the sentences were not completed, marking it a little tricky to fathom.

Plot: 13/15
Your plot is a little too cliché for me. Don’t get me wrong, the plot is enjoyable but I’ve read it a few times before. I think I even watched a few movies or dramas about the same kind of situation. Though it did have your own style and emotions in it.

Originality: 10/20
I found it original to a point, then the rest is all “been there, done that” kind of feeling. A sense of repetition.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 12/15
The only major issue I had in this category was the vocabulary. It was too elementary for me.

Detail: 2/5
Not enough details! I want to know what the scenery is and the kind of atmosphere is around them.
For instance, in the forewords at the hospital room, you could’ve made it a lot more interesting. The first two lines you went just starting to use some description words. Here’s an example you can survey:
I slowly opened my eyes to find myself in a sterile white room. I let my eyes wander around before stopping at two distinguished figures at the side of my stiff, rough textured bed.
Wasn’t that a tad more appealing then the small section you have?

Writing Style: 7/10
Your writing could’ve been more pronounced if you written in a more set formation.

Overall enjoyment: 8/10
Your story wasn’t as tedious to read compared to other attempts. To say the least, it was quite enjoyable.

Bonus: 3/5

Total: 69/100

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